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Discussion in 'Film, Music, Literature, Art' started by Lupine, Oct 4, 2018.

  1. Pistil

    Pistil Guest

    Thank you. Much appreciate your thoughtful kindness.
     
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  2. Lupine

    Lupine Guest

    We writers have to support each other..
     
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  3. Lakeside

    Lakeside Well-Known Member FCN Regular

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    I am really enjoying these posts.

    I consider myself a decent writer but I can't write stuff like this.

    Thanks for posting it.

    Ls x
     
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  4. Pistil

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    I hope you'll post your writing too. You use words well, you seem sensitive and in/sightful; you have things to say and ways to say them unique and beautiful as a snowflake. No two alike. No one else here can write stuff like yours--because it's yours alone, your sweetness and light. Please :cool:
     
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  5. imursecretbaby

    imursecretbaby Well-Known Member

    Both are beautifully written. Thank you for sharing.
     
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  6. Pistil

    Pistil Guest

    Like. Very much.
     
  7. xyzrp

    xyzrp Well-Known Member FCN Regular

    Staphylococcal exaggerating omg :p
     
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  8. Thalassa

    Thalassa Guest

    Staphylococcal... lol

    Never. Not with you

    You know you are a gem
     
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  9. SnoopSlimes

    SnoopSlimes Well-Known Member

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    Well, I myself do not dabble in all this writing and all, but..I do have one thing that will definitely spark up this whole paragraph...burritos are life, margaritas are divine, tequila is..well..Jersey Shore..lmao, and best of all, food is LIFE!

    The End.
     
  10. Bdj1992

    Bdj1992 Well-Known Member FCN Regular

    @xyzrp nah for real that piece you wrote was freaking good. I really liked it
     
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  11. Lupine

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    I bet you can ;)

    And thanks folks for the praise. I'm just the ideas person and a semi capable wordsmith. The real talent is those who are sharing. And I hope we'll see more in time.
     
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  12. Lupine

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    Okay nice piece needs something though. It has direction just a bit jumbled..

    I before couldn't will help that line flow. You don't need the first and in the You took my love line. Put a comma in its place..

    Try this..

    One day I will release my inner flame, melt the box to ashes.

    Otherwise your mixing tenses.

    But a good piece, raw emotion is good.
     
  13. Lupine

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    @Bdj1992 sorted chap. Reads a lot better and I always say it's not complete till it's in print :cool:
     
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  14. FlyBaby

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    The thumping of my heart beat swells inside my ears.
    My chest feeling like the landing pad, of an avalanche just released.
    The hairs on my body stand on end. An electric current running through.
    Is it the chill in the air that tightens my skin?
    Or is it the anticipation of what he'll do?

    Kneeling on the velvet pillow, I sit and wait.
    Hands resting on my thighs, they itch to touch my yearning parts.
    My plump ass sitting back, perched upon my heals.
    Craving for a hand to soothe the sting it wields.
    Back nice and straight pushing out my breasts, nipples hard in need. Lips painted red to frame his dick. Long black hair braided for a nice tight grip.

    Here I wait, for his touch, for his commands.

    Changed out last sentence *heart thumping in my ears.


    I was just messing around with that peice up above too... trying my hand at something new.

    Sorry its Erotica :D
     
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  15. Lupine

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    Nice piece @FlyBaby . You could drop kneeling on your knees to just kneeling or say what your kneeling on? Floor, cushion, marbles (sorry silly I know :cool:)
     
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  16. Bdj1992

    Bdj1992 Well-Known Member FCN Regular

    that aint a problem at all :)

    really like your style of writing :)
     
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  17. FlyBaby

    FlyBaby Guest

    Is that better? Or no?
    Question... as a guy do you prefer to read dick, cock, member, or erection? Or does it really matter?
     
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  18. Lupine

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    No that's good, it adds a feeling of decadence to it..I like..
     
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  19. Pistil

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    Interesting question. I think like the thing itself, it's more a matter of how it's used and by whom.
     
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  20. Lupine

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    Often saying something like taking him into my mouth is good if your going for subtle. Otherwise go for what you feel works best, what would you call it?
     
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  21. Lakeside

    Lakeside Well-Known Member FCN Regular

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    I actually have been posting snippets, on the 'what are you doing now' thread.
    I'll sneak something in here when I have something completed I consider 'post-worthy'.

    Ls x
     
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