Beyond the Profile Post

Lakeside said:
I am really enjoying these posts.

I consider myself a decent writer but I can't write stuff like this.

Thanks for posting it.

Ls x
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I hope you'll post your writing too. You use words well, you seem sensitive and in/sightful; you have things to say and ways to say them unique and beautiful as a snowflake. No two alike. No one else here can write stuff like yours--because it's yours alone, your sweetness and light. Please :cool:
 
Bdj1992 said:
It is the light that pulls me out of the darkness i am in.
But yet the silence i admire, the silence of being in my own thoughts inside this dark empty room.
But there you are running trough my head that sparks up my mind and lightens me up.
Why dont you use that spark to let me see and give me a path out of the darkness.
Take my hand and pull me out, dont push me back into the void.
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Both are beautifully written. Thank you for sharing.
 
Lakeside said:
I am really enjoying these posts.

I consider myself a decent writer but I can't write stuff like this.

Thanks for posting it.

Ls x
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I bet you can ;)

And thanks folks for the praise. I'm just the ideas person and a semi capable wordsmith. The real talent is those who are sharing. And I hope we'll see more in time.
 
Okay nice piece needs something though. It has direction just a bit jumbled..

I before couldn't will help that line flow. You don't need the first and in the You took my love line. Put a comma in its place..

One day i will release my inner flame and will melt this box to ash.
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Try this..

One day I will release my inner flame, melt the box to ashes.

Otherwise your mixing tenses.

But a good piece, raw emotion is good.
 
The thumping of my heart beat swells inside my ears.
My chest feeling like the landing pad, of an avalanche just released.
The hairs on my body stand on end. An electric current running through.
Is it the chill in the air that tightens my skin?
Or is it the anticipation of what he'll do?

Kneeling on the velvet pillow, I sit and wait.
Hands resting on my thighs, they itch to touch my yearning parts.
My plump ass sitting back, perched upon my heals.
Craving for a hand to soothe the sting it wields.
Back nice and straight pushing out my breasts, nipples hard in need. Lips painted red to frame his dick. Long black hair braided for a nice tight grip.

Here I wait, for his touch, for his commands.

Changed out last sentence *heart thumping in my ears.


Bdj1992 said:
@FlyBaby want to read one of yours :) (if you have the time:oops:)
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I was just messing around with that peice up above too... trying my hand at something new.

Sorry its Erotica :D
 
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Nice piece @FlyBaby . You could drop kneeling on your knees to just kneeling or say what your kneeling on? Floor, cushion, marbles (sorry silly I know :cool:)
 
Lupine said:
Nice piece @FlyBaby . You could drop kneeling on your knees to just kneeling or say what your kneeling on? Floor, cushion, marbles (sorry silly I know :cool:)
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Is that better? Or no?
Question... as a guy do you prefer to read dick, cock, member, or erection? Or does it really matter?
 
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Often saying something like taking him into my mouth is good if your going for subtle. Otherwise go for what you feel works best, what would you call it?
 
Pistil said:
I hope you'll post your writing too. You use words well, you seem sensitive and insightful; you have things to say and ways to say them unique and beautiful as a snowflake. No two alike. No one else here can write stuff like yours--because it's yours alone, your sweetness and light. Please :cool:
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I actually have been posting snippets, on the 'what are you doing now' thread.
I'll sneak something in here when I have something completed I consider 'post-worthy'.

Ls x
 
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