Poetry Poetry

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  1. Lupine

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    Don't know wattpad.
     
  2. MeganB

    MeganB Well-Known Member FCN Regular

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    It's an application where you get free books to read...It's my best pal...
     
  3. Lupine

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    Ahhh okay, I use Scribd. Same sort of thing I guess.
     
  4. NiceGuy

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    I Love Your Poetry So Much Baby & Glad to your Prince Xoxo
     
  5. Spangle

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    Just listening to the sound of the sea
    Sat in the dunes, my doggy and me
    The waves rush in, perhaps bringing treasure
    Or jetsam and flotsam in equal measure
    Off in the distance a dog barks in play
    Wetting his paws in the warmth of the spray
    To my east is a wind-farm, to my west is a tower
    Before me the sea with it's mighty power
    The sun beams down, burning my skin
    But not quite as much as my soul does within
    It was here on this beach that we both took the vow
    And yet my old lover, look at us now
    The fates decided there would be thunder
    And lightning to tear our hearts asunder
    I believed you, I did, every word
    When you said "yeah, ok, I DO my bird"
    How foolish I was, how oh so trusting
    As my tin ring now sits on my finger, rusting
    But I'll survive, I'm not at death's door
    Not like I haven't been here before
    The aching and emptiness will soon pass
    And I'll find me a bird with a touch more class
     
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  6. Lupine

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    Nicely done on the rhyming couplets Spangle. It's an area I often avoid doing as I find it restricts me, I hate boundaries like that when I write.

    I often do commission work and writing to a strict frame work often makes me hate the work once it's done.
     
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  7. Spangle

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    Yeah can write a bit of a rhyme but pretty hopeless on pure poetry...I may consider a career in tacky greeting card ditties :D
     
  8. Lupine

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    I've found that I wrote it and leave it. I then come back a few days later and change it and leave it. It takes me 3-4 hits before I don't hate it..

    Often sharing helps with like minded ppl. Though a few can get a little special and not like any critisism which can make improvement a little hard.
     
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  9. Spangle

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    Alas my memory won't allow for that. I'm an off the cuff type of gal or the thought is gone :oops:

    Constructive criticism should always be taken in the spirit in which it's offered I feel.
     
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  10. Lupine

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    Word wise I'm off the cuff. Poetry I have piles of half finished stuff that I often abandon or steal bits from when something works better.

    Indeed most people don't aim to be mean or rude. They just want to understand it better and make it work.
     
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  11. Spangle

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    I tend to speak mine aloud, as if I was reciting it, that doesn't always come across in just the written word.
     
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  12. Lupine

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    A quick Haiku

    Wolf howls at the Moon
    Moon sees no reason for a reply
    Wolf waits in hushed hope
     
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    pop another pill
    rest in peace

    going on a journy now
    bitch dont play with me

    every time she drop it now
    i want to eat those cheeks
    every time she shake it now
    the earth quakes underneath

    Evertime in the club now
    i order double cups
    looking at your hoe now
    she got double cups

    drowning in water cuz im fire
    blunt after blunt now
    i want to get higher

    clowns fighting for the crown
    trying to shut me down
    im was lost but
    now im found

    spin it again bro​
     
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  14. PumpkinPie

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    Shards of paper scattered about
    Broken discouraged failed heart
    Flying would be relief right now
    Take me there if only in a dream
    Sweet escape last a bit longer
    Let the thoughts go as they may
    Gray days last and last
     
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  15. Billy_B

    Billy_B Well-Known Member FCN Regular

    I heard his golden voice and marked him trace, a common thing the hidden grace, and conquer wonder out of emptiness until mean things put on beauty like a dress, and all the world was an enchanted place.
     
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  16. MeganB

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    Looking forward to write and read more here... Xxxxxxxx
     
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  17. MeganB

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    Connection

    As they sit gently on the bed
    Both of them lost in their beautiful moment
    As he whispers sweet nothings into her ears
    Shyness overwhelms her
    Enterwinig the edge of her top with his fingers
    While caressing her lustrous hair
    Igniting her senses as his palm touches her cheek
    He raises her coy face towards him
    He gently places his ears to her heart
    Wrapping her in a warm embrace
    He lovingly runs his fingers on her lips
    Trying to catch the unspoken words
    She answers with a soft sigh
    As she begins to bare her soul to him
    The universe witnessed this union
    Her lips began to quiver
    Having experience a sweet moments
    Knowing that they are connected
    Connected for life.
    Love,
    Meg xxxxxxx


     
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  18. Lupine

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    Very nice Meg. The one minor thing I'd change fingers on her lips, to fingers over her lips. It's more emotive of the sensation and shows movement.
     
  19. Spangle

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    Love
    Seeps into my consciousness
    Trickles over the blocks in my mind
    Slowly crawls to my chest
    Finds the dull rhythm
    Charges the paddles
    Stands clear
    And delivers the shock
    Stars appear
    Butterflies gather
    My soul awakens
    Take me there
    Sweet union
     
  20. Lupine

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    Very nice Spangle. Good solid symbolism as well..
     
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