Poetry Poetry

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MeganB said:
My love,

There are days when I lay awake like an owl.
Alone on my bed, I wondered...
" Why am I so lucky...? "
You're just like one of those prince charming of fairly tales.
Saved me from the troubles.
Stood behind me to catch each fall of mine.
Made me laugh with your silly jokes.
Turned me red and blushiee with those whispers of yours.
All my teary nights became beautiful memories.
Changed my nightmares to beautiful dreams.
You made my life so complete.
So now that I have you for myself.
I know for sure.
That......
I am yours forever and ever.


Love,
MB
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I Love Your Poetry So Much Baby & Glad to your Prince Xoxo
 
Just listening to the sound of the sea
Sat in the dunes, my doggy and me
The waves rush in, perhaps bringing treasure
Or jetsam and flotsam in equal measure
Off in the distance a dog barks in play
Wetting his paws in the warmth of the spray
To my east is a wind-farm, to my west is a tower
Before me the sea with it's mighty power
The sun beams down, burning my skin
But not quite as much as my soul does within
It was here on this beach that we both took the vow
And yet my old lover, look at us now
The fates decided there would be thunder
And lightning to tear our hearts asunder
I believed you, I did, every word
When you said "yeah, ok, I DO my bird"
How foolish I was, how oh so trusting
As my tin ring now sits on my finger, rusting
But I'll survive, I'm not at death's door
Not like I haven't been here before
The aching and emptiness will soon pass
And I'll find me a bird with a touch more class
 
Nicely done on the rhyming couplets Spangle. It's an area I often avoid doing as I find it restricts me, I hate boundaries like that when I write.

I often do commission work and writing to a strict frame work often makes me hate the work once it's done.
 
Yeah can write a bit of a rhyme but pretty hopeless on pure poetry...I may consider a career in tacky greeting card ditties :D
 
I've found that I wrote it and leave it. I then come back a few days later and change it and leave it. It takes me 3-4 hits before I don't hate it..

Often sharing helps with like minded ppl. Though a few can get a little special and not like any critisism which can make improvement a little hard.
 
Alas my memory won't allow for that. I'm an off the cuff type of gal or the thought is gone :oops:

Constructive criticism should always be taken in the spirit in which it's offered I feel.
 
Word wise I'm off the cuff. Poetry I have piles of half finished stuff that I often abandon or steal bits from when something works better.

Indeed most people don't aim to be mean or rude. They just want to understand it better and make it work.
 
pop another pill
rest in peace

going on a journy now
bitch dont play with me

every time she drop it now
i want to eat those cheeks
every time she shake it now
the earth quakes underneath

Evertime in the club now
i order double cups
looking at your hoe now
she got double cups

drowning in water cuz im fire
blunt after blunt now
i want to get higher

clowns fighting for the crown
trying to shut me down
im was lost but
now im found

spin it again bro​
 
I heard his golden voice and marked him trace, a common thing the hidden grace, and conquer wonder out of emptiness until mean things put on beauty like a dress, and all the world was an enchanted place.
 
Connection

As they sit gently on the bed
Both of them lost in their beautiful moment
As he whispers sweet nothings into her ears
Shyness overwhelms her
Enterwinig the edge of her top with his fingers
While caressing her lustrous hair
Igniting her senses as his palm touches her cheek
He raises her coy face towards him
He gently places his ears to her heart
Wrapping her in a warm embrace
He lovingly runs his fingers on her lips
Trying to catch the unspoken words
She answers with a soft sigh
As she begins to bare her soul to him
The universe witnessed this union
Her lips began to quiver
Having experience a sweet moments
Knowing that they are connected
Connected for life.
​
Love,
Meg xxxxxxx


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Very nice Meg. The one minor thing I'd change fingers on her lips, to fingers over her lips. It's more emotive of the sensation and shows movement.
 
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